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Middle-aged man walks through his house
Writes a farewell note to his wife
Retrieves a gun from a dresser drawer
Frustration as he searches for a bullet
Loads the bullet and pulls the trigger
Splatter of blood on the opposite wall
The world turns a little bit more
Teenage girl walks to a medicine cabinet
Writes her last words on the mirror
Searching for a bottle of sleeping pills
Swiped a flask from the liquor cabinet
Booze and pills go down the hatch
Puddle of vomit on the bathroom floor
The world turns a little bit more
Newlywed walks across an old derelict bridge
Writes a note and tapes it securely
Peering down at the water far below
Photo of his wife in his pocket
Says a silent prayer and goes forth
A hop, skip and a jump away
The world turns a little bit more
College student walks up to the attic
Carves his name on the wooden rafters
Thick and sturdy rope in his hand
Tosses the rope over the nearest crossbeam
Ties it around his neck in silence
One swift kick and he's hanging ten
The world turns a little bit more
Elderly woman walks out to her garage
Will and testament in seven short words
Distraught by the death of her husband
Gets in her car and starts it
Making sure the garage door remains closed
Car and woman share their last breaths
The world turns a little bit more
Writes a farewell note to his wife
Retrieves a gun from a dresser drawer
Frustration as he searches for a bullet
Loads the bullet and pulls the trigger
Splatter of blood on the opposite wall
The world turns a little bit more
Teenage girl walks to a medicine cabinet
Writes her last words on the mirror
Searching for a bottle of sleeping pills
Swiped a flask from the liquor cabinet
Booze and pills go down the hatch
Puddle of vomit on the bathroom floor
The world turns a little bit more
Newlywed walks across an old derelict bridge
Writes a note and tapes it securely
Peering down at the water far below
Photo of his wife in his pocket
Says a silent prayer and goes forth
A hop, skip and a jump away
The world turns a little bit more
College student walks up to the attic
Carves his name on the wooden rafters
Thick and sturdy rope in his hand
Tosses the rope over the nearest crossbeam
Ties it around his neck in silence
One swift kick and he's hanging ten
The world turns a little bit more
Elderly woman walks out to her garage
Will and testament in seven short words
Distraught by the death of her husband
Gets in her car and starts it
Making sure the garage door remains closed
Car and woman share their last breaths
The world turns a little bit more
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I came up with the general notion for this poem yesterday and I toyed with the notion all day before deciding to write it. The words poured forth from my mind a little bit easier than on "Utopia," since I actually had lines in mind rather than just concepts.
I title this poem "Seven" because of the number of words in each line, and the number of lines in each stanza. I wanted to also give the poem seven stanzas to fit the name better, but despite my attempts, I couldn't come up with two additional stanzas that wouldn't seem out of place.
George Carlin once observed that nearly a million people commit suicide every year, which is nearly one every 30 seconds. With so many suicides and so many different ways to kill oneself, it's not a stretch to speculate that the scenarios I've written about here have actually happened to someone, somewhere, some time.
members:
If you were to write two additional stanzas for this poem in the same style as the ones already written, what person/method combinations would you come up with? I contemplated driving a car into a body of water, and self-induced blunt force trauma with something like a baseball bat, but I couldn't come up with unique age ranges for people to accompany them.
I title this poem "Seven" because of the number of words in each line, and the number of lines in each stanza. I wanted to also give the poem seven stanzas to fit the name better, but despite my attempts, I couldn't come up with two additional stanzas that wouldn't seem out of place.
George Carlin once observed that nearly a million people commit suicide every year, which is nearly one every 30 seconds. With so many suicides and so many different ways to kill oneself, it's not a stretch to speculate that the scenarios I've written about here have actually happened to someone, somewhere, some time.
members:If you were to write two additional stanzas for this poem in the same style as the ones already written, what person/method combinations would you come up with? I contemplated driving a car into a body of water, and self-induced blunt force trauma with something like a baseball bat, but I couldn't come up with unique age ranges for people to accompany them.
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I'll answer your questions, because in itself, its a good poem. It has a concept revolving around suicide, the line "The world turns a little bit more", the possibility that we as people and as the collective society are responsible for the number of suicides occurring in this day and age, and in general, that emos are delinquents.
anyway, what I had in mind: a guy hears voices in his head, and these voices are telling him things which are not true, and in essence are indicators of him having some form of schizophrenia. So he kills himself, after having lived his whole life in virtual isolation. That's one stanza.
The other: a prisoner from a high security prison kills himself. Has written on his arm "Fuck the world and fuck you, Tom".
That would be taking it too far, but here's what I think: every single person here, can be assumed to have some regret or something building up which makes them realize - very acutely - how they failed in life. Which is why they committed suicide. I had a suicide bomber in mind, but then that would be out of context.
All in all, its a nice poem. It fits with Utopia and can be taken alongside Depression as well. All three poems are interconnect in my view.